Cars zoomed past me as I walked down the pavement until I reached the market. I looked around for the burger stand and started walking towards it. Suddenly I lost control of my body and I started to throw stuff around and bash into the stands and people! People were screaming and running away, that’s when I began to have control of myself. I heard someone say ‘What was that for” I then looked around to see what they meant “Did I do that? What would I do that for?”...
I run up the stairs as quickly as I could, scrambling past all the paintings hanging on the walls, I was shaking, I was so nervous, I could smell the cooked breakfast downstairs waiting for me, today was a HUGE day! I ran back downstairs and stared at the letter written in pink ink, it stated this: ‘Dear L’oreall, You have been selected as…’ Before I could finish my sister ran in the door, letting a river of emotions flow in, “L’OREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE” She screamed rushing towards me “Oh go-” Before I could finish my sentence, she hugged me “ What’s that” She walked towards the letter and shrieked…
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